Its finally finished! MC Spew

[wottan]

This is a design for some shirts Im making. C&C welcome, and thanks for all the help from the critique forum:

PS I didnt realize it would be moved to this forum right away, so apologies for not putting it in my old thread.

[Dougbot]

I'm not totally sure why it got moved to be honest. I think it's pretty solid, all that's really lacking is some confidence in the lines. I'd bring up some of the yellows in the front arm, I don't like how it goes black right where the body starts. Also some of the yellow highlights on the guy have a slight black outline. Get rid of those, have the yellow reach the white. Cool piece, I like the idea alot. There's a lot of promise in it, and to be honest much worse art has been featured in the finally finished section. Keep with it.

[wottan]

Thanks, ill take it as a compliment that you think it could be in the finished section . And yeah when I look at the big version that I have, I can see what you mean, thanks for the pointer.

[ruzkin]

I find a lot of the lines very messy, and the mans lower arm just doesn't work for me. I'd feel it better if it was left out entirely.

[wottan]

Yeah that bottom arm has always been somewhat problematic. I dont know if I necessarily like just having one arm visible, looks kinda strange. Plus a lot of rappers gesture with their free hand during their sets. Ill se if I can play around with it.

[skid]

this is a sweet design, man...i agree with that left arm...i dont think you should leave it out totally, but mek him gesture something else...hmmm...dunno much about rap, so i guess u'll have to come up with your own alternative...if u wish

[wottan]

Thanks a lot for the compliment, and yeah Im still trying to work a different gesture in there.