T H E F A L L E N_Test cover/page designs

**Mack72** · August 31st, 2005, 07:00 AM

Hello there!
Long time no post! Here are some designs/concepts for comic pitch I'm working on. Nothing is final, really just a test of the technique/style...

Any crits would be greatly appreciated!
Thanks in advance
Mack

**Twisted Nail** · August 31st, 2005, 07:30 AM

I'm liking the 'chapter 1' page a lot, especially the top. The lower stuff however kind of bothers me, (obi-wan in the corner?) It feels to me like they were just pasted on with no relation to the rest of the images whatsoever, they don't really have a 'unified' style. Maybe you can solve this by filling up the blank spaces with some black and white forms like you did on the cover. Otherwise nice concepts and techniques, keep it up!

**p4b10** · August 31st, 2005, 07:42 AM

Great layout and overall feeling. I like your pencil portraits.

**tensai** · August 31st, 2005, 08:50 AM

is that the Roppongi Hills building (from Mori in tokyo) in the uppermost right panel?

tensai

**strych9ine** · August 31st, 2005, 10:08 AM

Cool layouts, I like the design variations for the cover. All of the portraits are very straight on, it might add some more interest to show some different angles of the faces. Nice work man, I dig it!

**Wraith** · August 31st, 2005, 08:32 PM

Page two really grabs my attention. Nice work. I like the blown out gritty urban look you got. Great for the right story.

Page one just looks like the same sKetch that got cut up.