integration

**seertekal** · July 21st, 2005, 10:15 AM

finally managed to upload....any c & cs welcome..

**Mr. Visions** · July 21st, 2005, 10:26 AM

I reaaly love the back. The colors and effect there I think is the strongest. The only crit I have is the face . It would rally be nice if the luminousity carried over into the face. Also the contruction of the face seems too tight and rigid, especially in the lips. Color overall would help this area. But, I like the color chiocies and the style of the back. Was this for?

- Visions

**Rebecca** · July 21st, 2005, 01:44 PM

Welcome btw!

I really like it a lot, but in my opinion, I'd say that It would look nicer if it had colours that harmonize. Also, one hand is bigger than the other, and the smaller one doesn't appear to be drawn as well as the other. The colour of the face looks a bit to yellow-ish, and the overall structure of the face need some work.

well, hoped to be of some help! bye

**DSillustration** · July 21st, 2005, 05:32 PM

excellent job on the hands, especially the top one!

**Cocofuppa** · July 23rd, 2005, 05:10 PM

Very abstract, but still carefull attention to detail, good stuff! The one thing I would have done if it was my piece though, would have been to use that pinky red colour at her left waist to fill the whole background instead.. I think it would have given the piece a bit more 'oomph' and contrast to the saturated skin tones. But then again thats just me

Peace

**Danilo** · July 23rd, 2005, 05:18 PM

cool, sorry no time for deeper look

**ApolloNuevo** · July 23rd, 2005, 07:31 PM

i say pushing more of the abstract shapes into her face would bring it together more...her face is too finely rendered as of now.

-dan

**seertekal** · July 25th, 2005, 05:30 AM

Hi guys...thankyou all very much for taking the time to comment and critique...the work is at the framers now ........it is being entered in a national drawing prize next week as the first panel of a five part series......

**seertekal** · July 28th, 2005, 07:53 AM

the final work...framed.....all comments welcome....

**Cocofuppa** · July 28th, 2005, 05:11 PM

Looks good, but I would put the two pictures on the right hand side at the same height as the two on the left so that it looks symetrical to give a bit of balance to the arrangement.

Peace

**seertekal** · July 30th, 2005, 03:38 AM

Thanks for looking ...Stephen.....really enjoyed looking at your website....excellent work on Uma!!!!!!!...this has gone into the comp as is....but will keep your suggestion in mind for the next one.....