=hard day=

**brachypelman** · July 18th, 2004, 02:15 PM

hello hello!

this is just another thing about stink...

let me know what you think...or smell...

**Syrogen** · July 18th, 2004, 02:37 PM

whoa sweet colors, your style is fantastic :eek:
my only crit is that the tarantula is hard to catch at first glance

**Scarn** · July 18th, 2004, 06:58 PM

Yah - agree with Syrogen on the colour comment - great contrast. first crit is that she looks very tense on the couch. not comfortable at all. at First I thought it was the angle of the back - but I now think it's because the weight of her body isn't affecting the couch cushions. second: that tile just peeking out from the left of the couch looks odd red. if the tiles stop there- you may want to sharpen that up. but if they don't, I don't see why a black tile becomes red. And I have one nit-pick. I have no idea what the interaction between the spider and the girl is. Is the spider smelling her shoe? I really dunno.
Ne who- that's all from me. hope it helps.

**jrr** · July 18th, 2004, 07:10 PM

i smell cherry and red.

**brachypelman** · July 20th, 2004, 03:08 PM

thank you

SCARN> yeah i just noticed the red tile...

for the interaction between the girl and the spider, well...it's just a girl who had a hard day, and the spider doesn't like the smell ... that's all...

**BlueMech** · July 20th, 2004, 04:11 PM

The colour and style on this are superb. I haven't any crits that haven't been addressed, but if you fixed those, this thing'd be perfect.

**Skank** · July 20th, 2004, 04:40 PM

hey!
i dig this alot man, very cool color choice, and a very sublime looking girl too :dorky:

for crits, i think the major one has been addressed, that she has no weight!!! it looks as tho shes hovering above the couch and not actually laying on it.
secondly, my eyes were immediately drawn to the seam in the couch, you have it rendered crystal clear, while everything else is very subdued....maybe you wanted to focus there...but somehow i doubt it :hh: since no other parts of the couch are rendered quite so clear, maybe you should dull it down a bit, and add some more highlights to the girl to make her pop out more.

great work man, post more!

**brachypelman** · July 27th, 2004, 12:52 AM

thank you for your crits, they are precious to me, because i'm still a newbee in colorwork. So i'll try to fix it all asap and maybe, i hope, it'll be better