Composition & Lighting

[mpb7496]

I'd like some feedback on the composition of this environment, as well as the lighting.

This scene is at night and the story revolves around the concept of dreams and nightmares. The perspective and angles within the room are distorted. I wanted the movement of the environment to point to the main character (who's lying on the bed).

As for lighting, I am a novice. I was trying to roughly block out the lights and darks. The light sources are the moonlight coming in through the windows, and the lamp on the night stand. I wanted pools of light on the floor and girl from the moon.

I think the very back wall is way too bright. But I wasn't sure how to amend it. So, please - critique and correct away!

[Ally Hodges]

Hey mpb7496!

This looks really fun! I think you are doing pretty good on the composition, I hope you don't mind if I throw in my two cents.

Like you said, you think it's too bright, I agree, I looks like it's sunny. I think you should knock back the contrast and keep the light areas to the lamp and concentrate of the moon making window shapes on the floor rather than everywhere. Here is an Andrew Wyeth painting to study.

http://reisman.lohudblogs.com/files/2009/01/wyeth.jpg

I think either in addition to, or instead of, the round carpet, perhaps a rectangular one so that it will add diagonals that will lead the the eye to the girl on the bed more. Directional lines!!

I hope that helps.

[mpb7496]

Yay! Feedback! I really appreciate the comments and advice!!

I'll play around with the carpet shape and definitely study up on the painting you gave as reference. I was hoping to get this kind of help! Thank you so much!

[mpb7496]

I went at this piece again, with the suggestions I received. Let me know what you think - better, worse? What else can I do to improve it?

[mpb7496]

Annnd a color-blocked version: