female warrior-WIP

[MariRosa]

I think maybe just the overall concept and side view of pose is just too flat and stiff, there is a lack of energy. I don't get the sense that she just cut someone with force. With some foreshortening and perhaps a change of camera angle with a feeling of movement I think this can go farther. Maybe consider her using two hands for the sword. Is that a katana? I believe those are two handed. Even a long blade needs two hands. Perhaps thumbnails should be considered. It's fun to see the progress.

[EduardoGaray]

hey, thanks Mari, yeah i´ve learned the importance of thumbnails the hard way
But, i´m not going to completely redo this picture, i will try to do my best with anatomy for now, but i´m planning to use all the useful information in this thread in a new work.

[EduardoGaray]

well, i think i´m done with this.
I know there are a bunch of mistakes still unresolved but i need to go on, and use all the things i learned in a new piece.
This is probably the last update:


I´m very grateful to all of you for all your critiques, notes, paints overs...
I´m learning so much with all of you!

[sone_one]

may i ask ask what it is exactly that youve learned? because to be honest to me its not obvious from your picture. youve avoided pretty much everything alice has mentioned in her great paintovers.

it maybe just me, but i think the first sketch is the strongest and everything done after, made it worse or at least not much better.

if you dont get what is ment by certain terms, go look it up or at least ask (interlocking for example), because at no point in your picture this did work, while beeing illustrated in alice' first po very well.

i think its quite cynical to say "thanks, i learned so much", while ignoring the important parts entirely, but that may just be me.

ps: whoever gave alice' post a 2 out of 10 rating, should avoid rating, until its understood how it works... i mean c'mon!

[EduardoGaray]

Sorry, but i think you misunderstood my last post.
As i said, i prefered to stop working in this one and use all the useful information of this thread in my next work I´m not trying to be rude sone, i appreciate your critique.
Do you ask what i learned? You will see.

[sone_one]

aye we'll see

i think it would be more beneficial for you to fix errors on this one though. the learning curve is just much steeper if you actually go back fixing errors instead of just noticing them trying to keep them in mind. and it would put your understanding of whats been critiqued to the test. some might still apply in the new pic... others wont.

all im trying to get at, is that imo youre losing a chance to really learn some things, turning the picture down as soon as it gets tough, hoping for the next picture to turn out better from the start, not running into most of these problems.

also youre wasting the effort that went into this one already, by calling it done prematurely, just because you dont want to bother with the hard parts. thats one of the major differences between amateurs and professionals imo.

[EduardoGaray]

thank you sone, i didn´t see it in that way.
Maybe its too late to follow your advice but i wont forget it, i promise.