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    Ok, I've been watching this painting for too long so I can't tell anymore what is wrong. And I know something is wrong about composition/values/colours... Please help...
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    Looking pretty interesting, I can see straight off that there's something weird going on with those feet and legs; The legs don't seem to be quite long enough, plus the feet need to be bigger and more grounded, the angle and placement of them at the moment looks as if they wouldn't support her weight. Liking whats going on above the waist though

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    I agree with Hypergear, those feet don't seem grounded, and there's something about the angles... Maybe you should try and paint a little bit of the ground, some small rocks or something, just where her feet are. That might make it look better.
    Just a little thing I thought about, if I were you I'd paint eyes instead of sunglasses. That would make it easier to make contact with the character, if that makes any sense.
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    The leg anatomy's off, particularly with the size of the feet relative to the rest of the body.
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    I think the values and colours look pretty good, however the feet definitely need to be fixed. They're too small, and don't seem to attach to the legs properly.
    The hand that's not holding the spray can looks small as well.

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    Thanks a bunch, people! You all were very helpful

    There is definitely something wrong with the legs and feet so now I am painting them over. I really hate drawing those so this will also be a good practice for me...

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    Tried to fix the legs and feet. Still not satisfied so please critique as much as you like
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    Hokay. I think part of the reason the feet aren't looking so good is that you aren't "placing the clothes over the form", if you catch my meaning. Don't get me wrong, they look better than last time, but you might want to play with angles until your happy that the stance is good.

    Speaking of stance, I'm a bit torn on the pose here... on the one hand, the character seems to be someone who is a bit jaded, maybe even apathetic, but is that what you were aiming for? if not, you might want to consider a slightly more dynamic pose. As to the legs, maybe it's the angle, but the right leg (as we're looking at the pic) is looking a bit thicker than the left, and the coat appears to blend straight into the leg, which is a definite no-no.

    Can't really tell due to the hood, but are the face and skull at the same angle, and if not, why not? Apart from that, it's still a good concept, and I'd like to see this one progress!
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    Thanks Darkwolf! That's really constructive critique.
    Forms of the lower part of the body are definitely not clear so I'll try to fix them.

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