Man-Made-Mermaid

**Gail_Blitzy** · July 14th, 2009, 05:24 PM

'Lo guys, proper excited about this competition, gonna try and make 2 entrires.

Here is the first one i've been workin on. Before i get on to colouring it, what do you guys think of the body proportions/anatomy as that's been struggeling with?

**TheDirtSyndicate** · July 14th, 2009, 09:50 PM

i think you've done a pretty good job so far with the anatomy, although i'm not so sure about your composition. i think a more interesting camera angle would help a lot.
also, those tubes... what are they connected to?
right now they're just going into the hips... what are they doing there?
i would think about what they're connected to INSIDE the mermaid. what is their actual purpose ya know?

*i keep having more thoughts!
ok, i looked at your original sketch again. the more rough version, and i like the composition of that better. adding the bottom of the tank makes it feel so small and not very impressive.. in the original sketch you dont see that and it feels bigger. also your lines aren't perfectly straight in the original sketch, so your perspective feels more like 3 point, you corrected that in your cleanup but i think that makes your image feel flat and boring. i would make it 3 piont, THAT would definitely make this feel bigger and more impressive.
the other thought i had was to drop the arm thats closest to us a bit more to seperate it from the mermaids body, really exagerating her pose, arch her back a bit more giving a better silhouette. it would also help make her look a bit more sexy because you'd be seeing her lower back and butt.

**Gail_Blitzy** · July 15th, 2009, 05:24 AM

Cheers for the comment! Mucho apprectiated =)
Will give your suggestions a try!

**miycko** · July 15th, 2009, 08:50 AM

Originally Posted by TheDirtSyndicate

ithe other thought i had was to drop the arm thats closest to us a bit more to seperate it from the mermaids body, really exagerating her pose, arch her back a bit more giving a better silhouette. it would also help make her look a bit more sexy because you'd be seeing her lower back and butt.

I agree, this would give it that little bit extra

**Gail_Blitzy** · July 15th, 2009, 04:20 PM

Ta-Da! have also begun to add some colour, May even add a reflection to note were the surface of the tank is

**Gail_Blitzy** · July 21st, 2009, 03:32 PM

This is my final rendering - would appreciate any comments and criticism

**Gail_Blitzy** · July 28th, 2009, 04:04 PM

A second entry that i'm hoping to get finished - You know how you can create virtual self on the internet, is effectively a birth of a new person! A birth of a new self!