DREADNOUGHT moved from Finally Finished

[STROMFISH]

i build this pic to practice.posted in the Finally Finished area.
but i have no ideal about to makes it better.
please give me some advice and critic,thank you very much

[IIKII]

Don't know much about 3d art but maybe you can add in more textures to make it more realistic.

[Giacomo]

This looks great.

I have no idea why they moved it from the "Finally Finished" section--it looks complete to me.

[PsiBug]

I like the model and the blown-out lighting. It looks like a video game cover or a board game cover.

The stars/lights along the top of the large render are a weak area and so is the text at the bottom in my opinion.

The black and white version is a more visually interesting angle and shows off the volume and the details of the model better.

[vardoburrito]

Is this a toy or 3 story high machine warmachine?

I would personally move the camera to the side to show more gun barrel/elipses detail.
The straight frontal shot doesn't do anything for me.

-You could play with the camera angle to create scale.
-Lessen the brightness of the back lights.
-Tone down the reflections?? maybe

It's the finished section, so it can't be here because of rendering.
Probably more with the whole composition and balancing of elements.
Everything is fighting for attention.

I would personally tone down the amount of reflection, and take of a few of those lights.
Focus on the 1st and secondary objects/subjects then the rest.
[Easier said than done on my end.]

Play around with the camera angles. Celebrate use with the details coupled with a mood.

[STROMFISH]

This looks great.

I have no idea why they moved it from the "Finally Finished" section--it looks complete to me.

yes，it is complete,but i want to get some advices or crtic
so ,i moved it

[STROMFISH]

Is this a toy or 3 story high machine warmachine?

I would personally move the camera to the side to show more gun barrel/elipses detail.
The straight frontal shot doesn't do anything for me.

-You could play with the camera angle to create scale.
-Lessen the brightness of the back lights.
-Tone down the reflections?? maybe

It's the finished section, so it can't be here because of rendering.
Probably more with the whole composition and balancing of elements.
Everything is fighting for attention.

I would personally tone down the amount of reflection, and take of a few of those lights.
Focus on the 1st and secondary objects/subjects then the rest.
[Easier said than done on my end.]

Play around with the camera angles. Celebrate use with the details coupled with a mood.

thank you very much
it is a warmachine from warhammer 40K(a game)

-You could play with the camera angle to create scale.
__thank you,i will do this as your advice

-Lessen the brightness of the back lights.
__yes,the glare are too strong! i will change this.

-Tone down the reflections?? maybe
__i think the reflections are beautiful ,and special reflection is my style. so.........

finally ,thankyou very much ,god bless you

[Craz]

The picture doesn't need to be so wide.

[BluepaiN]

I would like to see some gritty textures and battle-damage!

dreadnoughts are millenia-old warmachines, and they should look like that.
Add some scars, mud/dust and dont go overboard with all the shinyness.
They may be made of metal, but they're usually painted. And in a 40k battlefield, you dont want to stand out like a some big bling bling machine.

[Izzard Axel]

As for the camera angle, bringing it down and angling it up and moving it to the side will give it a sense of great size, and of course let you actually see the depth of the model. The textures Id have to agree on, the thing looks like shiny plastic. The stars at the top, like what was said before, are a weak point in the image. As things go back in space, they get less and less contrast. The things in the foreground have the most so the eye is drawn to them. In your render, everything has the same contrast, which is fatiguing to look at. And I agree, the reflections are just cranked up too high. Another thing to worry about is your overuse of Depth of Field effects. I wouldn't have made it so extreme if I were you. The eye doesn't blur out things you aren't focusing on THAT much. And the last problem I see with it is the lighting. Its very extreme and harsh, and there's too much glow everywhere. That combined with the contrast issue makes the piece visually exhausting to look at.

Hope that helps

Edit: I just noticed, but definitely take that ridiculous looking star shaped...thing...off of the mechs eyes.
Edit 2: I just did a bit of editing in PS. It isn't perfect obviously, there are things I cant change without adjusting the file and rerendering it.

[STROMFISH]

I would like to see some gritty textures and battle-damage!

dreadnoughts are millenia-old warmachines, and they should look like that.
Add some scars, mud/dust and dont go overboard with all the shinyness.
They may be made of metal, but they're usually painted. And in a 40k battlefield, you dont want to stand out like a some big bling bling machine.

thank you
but ,it is another style.emm~~after thousands battle,the dreadnought get a title named "emperor`s dreadnought"----the most holly title.
for that,the dreadnought get its third life,walk into the holly temple and get a new "clothes"
so there is no any battle damadge

[Pezz]

And in a 40k battlefield, you dont want to stand out like a some big bling bling machine.

Tell that to the Imperial Fists... They're bright yellow, and so are their Dreads! >.<

[STROMFISH]

hi,guys
here is my new camare vision
thanks for your advices
is this ok?