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    Nathan Shorts is offline For I am God. Level 1 Gladiator: Andabatae
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    First Stab

    I just recently got a copy of Flash MX and thought it'd be fun to try my hand at some animation. I've never tried any animation before other than flip books so don't be surprised if it seems rather amateur.

    Critiques are more than welcome!
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    Looks pretty damn smooth. I'd personally say it hits inbetween amateur and professional.

    Perhaps a bit more motion across the body would look better?

    The only real mistake that I can see is that the chin doesn't move smoothly like the rest of the face, sort of flickering during the mouth's down position. The fold line connected to the chin could use better spacing to make it move more smoothly.

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    you deffinetly did a lot of things right with the face wrinkles and mouth but some body jiggle would be cool. a whole body just standing still.... kinda wierd. but all in all pretty good

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