I need some help on the hair. But if you see anything else to fix that is fine.
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I need some help on the hair. But if you see anything else to fix that is fine.
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Level 5 Gladiator: Myrmillo
Firstly, it's a bit of a pet peeve but you might want to crop the picture to just that one girl and without all the white space, that's just a suggestion.
Starting with the hair, it seems a bit like a wig right now because of the highlights at the top of the hair which are undefined. Usually hair is parted or left to gravity, however right here is just laying flat, I think that could use a bit of work. You could use more white on the places you want to highlight on the hair; I can see you know where to highlight on the black portions you might want to add differrent widths of white to show the glossiness of the hair and the definition if that is what you are going for. The ends and almost all the brush strokes are a bit rigid in hardness and it seems a bit gritty and off this way, it is just a suggestion but I would turn the opacity down a bit. (this really goes for the picture as a whole.
The skin tone is pretty spot on, so are the alignment of the nose and lips, however if you don't mind completely reconstruction the picture I think it may look better portrait wise if the right eye was a tad lower and smaller.
The edge of the jawline the very tip of her chin is just a bit too pointy to me, I know it could be your style but it throws me off when my eyes travel upwards to the lips.
Other than these things you might want to add some more colors to the skin color just because it looks a tad flat.
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Pure white and pure black are bad, stay away from them
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Just think of the light source and it should help you define the 'white' and 'black thing. If it's a blue-ish color lighting her, it could shift the highlights on the black hair to some nice shades of dark blue, and shift the white to a cool-greyscale!
This is a perfect peice to have critiqued you know! It's simple, and yet a lot could be done to improve or make it interesting. =D
Go ahead and crop it in a little more so we see just the girl (as said above) and decide if you want a cool light or hot/warm light hitting her--Either will make some drastic changes!!
Before you work too much with refining the hair, go ahead and rough in the shades that you've chosen for the light in the hair, but before going on--try to fix the face.
With the face the eyes are a bit off kilter, and they could use some more contrast to really make them pop ^.^, lower the lips as they're a bit too high, and round off that chin--and you should be good to refine it some more after that!!
Good job so far, don't give up!
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I decided to pretty much reamp the image. The eye was way too big, but that is fixed now. This small practice piece made me learn a lot. Unless you see anything wrong with it, I'll call it done.
Thank you for all the honest critiques. I really appreciate them. And this made my work a lot better.
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