Bringing it all together... Crit would be lovely

[Tsubane]

Okay, so...

Other than the fact that the elephant looks like it's pooping out the mouse...

Anyone see anything that I can improve?

[Maridius]

You know if you hadn't suggested the elephant was pooping out the mouse I wouldn't have had that impression because the mouse is running along the same tangent as the elephant's leg. This is a very bold, fun piece and I keep finding a new animal each time I take another look--like the snake forming the upper eyelid and the piscine 'whites' (seahorse or porpoise?). Only real weakness might be a little confusion as to what I should look at first since no one animal takes precedence over another except by size. I'm not much on composition and I might have a wierd way of looking at things though, so take that with a grain of salt!

[Tsubane]

Thanks very much! That was helpful.
Yeah, When I draw, I tend to slant things a little to the left, so I'm sure that contributed to the confusion somewhat. I'll be more careful on my next one not to overdo it, haha.

About the mouse, I figured I might as well up and say it, because everyone I've shown this to so far says the same thing about it. XD

[Bai Fan]

It is interesting. Are you going to color it?

[Tsubane]

Hmm, I've thought about it. But somehow, I think color would ruin the impression of a face that it's supposed to make.

.... I really do want to color it. |D Knowing me, I'd screw it up, though...