I started this 2 days ago...
What should I change? Or what is wrong?
Let me first say that this is hilarious and glorious, ahaha. I love it!
It seems like there should be more rubble coming into the room. Maybe having a few more pieces flying out at her would add a bit more action to the scenario.
Love the drool.
Absolutly Brilliant. Only thing I would add would be some dust particles and clouds.
The house feels really barren and not really lived in. I don't think the monitor would have fallen there if the table was just pushed over.
There is no chair. What was she sitting on?
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place your signature at the bottom-right to balance it out.
oh, and the wall to the right needs to be more consistently darker.
I find it weird that the skirting board beside the monitor/tablet has those highlights.
I absolutely love the bizarre concept of this image! The weird-ass creature itself looks totally awesome too!
I'm less convinced by the girl though, I think she needs some work. I think you should figure out her underlying form before you think about draping her - her contact points with the floor are her elbows and her bum, make sure you show that with weight! Right now, if you chopped off her arms it would look very much like she was lying straight on her back - you need to show the curve of her spine as it bends up to accommodate the length of her upper arm. There is also a big problem with her right leg - it looks like it is angling out in exactly the same direction as her left leg, it needs to be angled out more to the right.
One last problem I think the image has is in the perspective, particularly the left hand side of the room - it looks like it is skewed in too much of an angle. I wondered if perhaps the skirting board was being smashed upwards by the beast, but I don't think so as the floor seems to be level with it.
I did a rough paintover to point out what I mean -
Hope that helps!
Other than what's been noted I feel like the biggest problem is all the white, it'd flattening it out a lot. Go with a warmer color (yellow works) and maybe show a very slight suggestion of what's going on outside. And yeah, more debris.
The main problem with the girl is her body language really. She looks more like she was asleep and is propping up to see what's going on, rather than alarmed at the big #(&Y%# thing that's just crashed her wall. You can inject a bit more drama by doing really simple things like placing one elbow farther back than the other, create the suggestion that she's shuffling backwards. Same with the legs, although Pinflux's paintover already showed you what you can do with that.
Nice work otherwise, I like the concept and this has promise.
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