Please critique My Animated Film!

**breeson** · November 7th, 2008, 08:55 AM

Please let me know what you think!
You can check it out here:

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If you like it please sign in and vote for us!! we could use all the help we can get!

you can also see some more cartoons at:

www.apt323.com

www.breeson.blogspot.com

thanks for your time!

breeson

**goingvintage** · November 7th, 2008, 11:59 PM

I love this! The animation seemed a little bit stiff, but you might have done that on purpose. In my opinion, it would help it "flow" more.

But I LOVE the storyline! It's so funny and entertaining. Plus whoever did the voices is like the most amazing person ever.
So yeah nice job.

**HunterKiller_** · November 8th, 2008, 04:02 AM

Nothing to crit. Awesome! Haha.

**Diphallia** · November 8th, 2008, 07:04 AM

hahaha fucking wonderful!

**breeson** · November 17th, 2008, 05:43 PM

Thanks guys!!

**breeson** · November 23rd, 2008, 06:13 AM

Hey Everyone,, thanks for checkin out my animation!

I'm gonna start posting comics in the sketchbook section which I'm gonna try to update regularily!
Check it out here

http://conceptart.org/forums/showthread.php?t=142541

thanks!
Breeson

**breeson** · December 15th, 2008, 07:18 AM

Thanks to everyone that voted!!

**rattus** · March 5th, 2009, 10:45 AM

cool =)

**BlueVon** · March 5th, 2009, 07:14 PM

LMAO!!! thats just fricken great XD really love the style and the quick actions.

**TheDirtSyndicate** · March 6th, 2009, 03:45 AM

it definitely made me giggle
the part where he caught fire was great
haha
nice job

**SalOnimaruRem** · March 6th, 2009, 10:29 AM

hahaha hilarious x]

**(M) Artist** · March 8th, 2009, 04:23 AM

Awesome !!! haha

**someynguy** · March 9th, 2009, 02:13 PM

LoL, the best part is when he's like "time to GET WASTED!". I like the style you used. It looks good. If I were to critique it I would just say to add some extra frames here and there to make it flow smoother, so it doesn't look as choppy. Excellent job though, this is great.

**batcustard** · March 10th, 2009, 04:20 AM

You have anticipation and reactions, poses and gags... but I don't see any timing really. What happened to your inbetweens? Listen, Im all for snappy timing, but I think its probably a good idea to vary it up a little bit. The only things I saw moving in a calculated way really... were the inanimate objects. your poses are great, super legible silluhettes, but this project could have nothing but benifited from a little more in the way of intellegent timing. Also if your doing a personal project, its always better to work on ones. Almost everything looks better on ones, precisely because we can work with the timing of our actions.
I resent your lack of bones, but chalk it up to a stylistic choice.

Anyways, your work is up there, I'm not trying to drag you down or anything.