Request critique

[Hatton Slayden]

Before I color this image I wanted some comments on it to see if I missed anything. The girl creature is based off an ant, I call them Helvolums based of Dorylus helvolus, the African Safari Ant. That is until I find a good enough word that mean “Honeypot Ant” and Repletes just doesn’t sound right.



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[benjoepen]

It all looks very tight to me to be honest.

Only thing that might be worth checking is the guys left arm I'm not 100% convinced the foreshortening is working as well as it could but I'm really scraping the barrel

[Maridius]

Best part of this lineart is how both characters' body language and expression 'speak' about their relationship. The man is clearly annoyed by the ant woman but both know one another AND know one another's buttons. She's got one arm draped over his head and he's telling her off good! As far as flaws, the man's right arm needs work--his upper arm seems stunted. Otherwise, great work here!

[MaryCarey]

I know its facing us nearly straight on but I think her left foot is too small compared to her other foot and hands. I love the image though.

[Hatton Slayden]

Thank you for your critique it is all very helpful. Left foot, left arm got it. I thought Maridius’ comment was particularly fun to read because I had not really thought of the characters relationship. One last thing, where is the “thanks” button so I can send a “Thanks” to everyone who helped?

[Hatton Slayden]

Ok I’ve fixed the hand and arm, I’ve just laid down some flat colors but I am not all that confident with color because I have a bit of red, green, yellow color blindness. Coments?




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