invinciblewombat VS SwimmingBird - JUDGED

**invinciblewombat** · March 1st, 2008, 05:18 PM

DEADLINE: monday 3/3 8:00 PM EST

topic 8

player 1 (SwimmingBird ): the failing light of battle
A- you battle fatigue, your nuckels are raw and bloodied, but the day is yours.
B- slumping in the cold the frost takes hold, your muscles tighten as the chill seeps deep into your flesh.

player 2 (invinciblewombat) : making camp
A - As the amber red sun sinks through the clouds you and your bretheren have made camp atop the battle summit.
B - you awaken on a dead battlefield, you must have been knocked out cold or stunned for the majority of the carnage, all you can hear now are the moans of the half dead. you stand up slowly, alive but shamed.

**SwimmingBird** · March 1st, 2008, 06:56 PM

k let's a duel

**SwimmingBird** · March 1st, 2008, 06:58 PM

ill be player 1, scene A (because I have the same topic as JPC that starts today also)
you be Player 2

**invinciblewombat** · March 1st, 2008, 07:27 PM

cool, putting up deadline, lemme know if it's good for you

**SwimmingBird** · March 1st, 2008, 07:43 PM

the deadline is fine wombat
so which scene are you going to do. cant wait

**invinciblewombat** · March 1st, 2008, 07:51 PM

im gonna go with B, lets do this.

**SwimmingBird** · March 1st, 2008, 08:15 PM

kk. i might be able to post a wip up tonight

**invinciblewombat** · March 3rd, 2008, 05:35 PM

okay, here it goes

**B-nine** · March 3rd, 2008, 05:41 PM

this looks awesome invinciblewombat. I love the simplicity of your rendering style, it's just really attractive to me for some reason. I would try and make the front characters head in light though, I think it would be a nice focal point. you could just shift that shadow a bit to pull it off I think. There should also be some blood on the blade(s) as well as some leading from swimmingbird's character to yours.

I really hope you attack our duel in a similar fashion

**Corrick** · March 3rd, 2008, 06:05 PM

Oh-h-h man... that is an inspired composition. The elegance of it is overwhelming. I have to agree with B-nine though, after a fashion. It looks like there should be more signs of a scuffle, unless you caught the opponent off guard. The snow is almost too pristine. Also, the sword and the axe make a bizarre parallel. I'd suggest altering the angle of one of them at least.

Good show!

**invinciblewombat** · March 3rd, 2008, 06:15 PM

thanks for the crits guys, it's going to have to stay as is at the moment so i can get working on b-nine's duel but i will definitly be polishing it up more for portfolio work.

**SwimmingBird** · March 3rd, 2008, 06:17 PM

it looks nice wombat
i only worked on mine for an hour
ill see if i can furnish up my sketch in photoshop

**Justin.** · March 3rd, 2008, 06:33 PM

wombat.... awesome... oh man..

**SwimmingBird** · March 3rd, 2008, 07:57 PM

i tried to make a british infantry grunt fighting in Valley Forge (1777 - 1778)
I did Person 1, Scene A as agreed:
A- you battle fatigue, your nuckels are raw and bloodied, but the day is yours.

only worked for two hours on this so its just a sketch. I might work on it in the future for a portolio . .. .
(sorry if its too big, dont know how to post pics that well)
*0* I had about three minutes left until deadline so i was sweating this one out . . .. think we good to be judge yet?