need some direction

[shannowman]

Hi, i've been here before but lost concentration. Trying to start again. Just want to know how i could improve.

[krazybov]

i like the idea of it being just greyscale with the only colour being the red eyepiece.

continue to fill the white background in the lower half as you have done at the top. the eyepiece looks too flat, work some more reflections in there. i would like to see it more bulbous with a fisheye reflection of some face pipes

[GaussianRaider]

My 2 pence.
The basic sketch is pretty decent, i love the industrial-gigeresque atmosphere, i think that at this stage the main weakness of your artwork lies in the illumination.
It's flat and uninteresting.
Try a dark, extreme and exagerated lighting.
Don't just try to make the shapes look tridimensional, the first thing you have to do is to imagine the setting (where the "character" is located, what surrounds him, what does it hear, etc) once you have a clear setting start adding light.
Hope it helps.

[shannowman]

Thanks alot, will try an sort out the problems