--- Speedpainting --- 10x for good critics ---

**cucak** · October 17th, 2007, 09:35 PM

All critics are welcome. (lighting, composition, texture, colors, detail, concept....)
Thanks!

ME --- SKETCHBOOK --- Meduse painting --- Diabolo painting ---

**Eponine** · October 17th, 2007, 11:12 PM

First off; I really like this

Its beautiful!
Unfortunatly I'm pretty clueless... But ill try to give some advise even so

I think I'd like to see even bigger contrasts in this image...
and as far as lighting goes, id like to see that also show even more clearly in the right places.
Texture, Im definatly not the right person to ask, because ill just tell you to put in as much detail in texture as possible lol. but that may not be your style or what youre going for

But.. id like to see a bit more clear indication of texture in front.. as opposed to give a contrast to the backround.

**PuppyKitten** · October 17th, 2007, 11:18 PM

I love the colors and misty atmosphere! How long did this take?

**cucak** · October 19th, 2007, 03:17 PM

10x for your comments

Eponine - I will try to add more detail, texture, lights this week, thanks
Puppykitten - it took me about 5h becose its my second speedpainting = concept, composition, testing brushes and Ctrl Z. But next time I will be speeder :-)). tkanks yoo

**Grief** · October 19th, 2007, 03:51 PM

i like the texture and color, good brush work.

i feel the lower left should be brightened, the valley-pathway area, as i see no obstructions that would be overshadowing that section.

also the bridge things between the canyon-monolithic-cliff-things is messing with my brain. the cliff on the right appears to be closer, yet the bridge receeds to it? huh? it looks like the cliff on the left is further in depth, yet its treated as though its more in the foreground.

if you cover the lower half of the image, the depth works, but you need to refine the lower sections of the right-cliff to push it back in space.

**Matt Dixon** · October 19th, 2007, 06:58 PM

Nice mood and colour scheme.

Grief's making some good points there. The lower half of the image could certainly take some extra elements - maybe some more rocks, an indication of the floor between the cliffs or maybe even a foreground plane of some sort. I'd hold off from adding further detail to the existing features though - I think that will kill the good impression of depth you have here.

You need to solve the optical illusion Grief mentions with the bridges. Are the bridges supposed to span the gap betwen the cliffs?

Take a look at the overall design of your image, too. The cliffs are heavy, angular forms, but the bridges are contradictary shapes - delicate and curved. As a result, the bridges don't look like a natural part of the landscape. That's fine if you want the bridges to look different - perhaps suggesting that they're constructed, rather than natural - but I think you'd need to reinforce this in some way. Add some supports and a hand rail to make them look like rope bridges, for example. If you want them to look natural, think about bulking them up to give their shape a connection with the other natural forms in your image.

You might want to keep this as a pure mood piece, but I'd consider adding a focal point of some kind. Perhaps a small flock of birds, something natural like a stream or waterfall, or a traveller on the bridge ( looks like there might be something on the bridge, but it's too small to notice... ) - it doesn't have to be anything particularly bold or detailed, just something to grab the viewer's eye and draw them into your scene.

**cucak** · October 20th, 2007, 01:07 PM

Thanks Guys, its realy good comments

Grief - I will work on shadows and depth of elements.
Matt - Two bridges are not natural elements and they span the gap betwen the cliffs. They are a some no natural elements as a supports and a rails but I will work on it to make it more visible and evident. The cliffs are very big, that is why my travellers on the top brigde are too small. I must work on the size of the elements in my image. Your homepage are realy cool and small tutorial too. big thanks

**cucak** · October 21st, 2007, 12:33 AM

Here is corrected image with new lighting, shadows, construction details, one small old character, one hungry vulture and death river.
10X for comments

My --- SKETCHBOK --- Meduse Panting --- Speed paintng --- Diabolo ---

**AmDivinity** · October 21st, 2007, 01:18 AM

Its awesome, The latest one is awesome, maybe a little more shadow on that right sided mountain, or maybe its reflection. Personally, The first one is my favorite, you can feel the speed in it, as for what Eponine was saying about needing more texture ect... its speed painting, not about that.. Great work, keep it up.

Cheers,
Am