sea, wip

[tja88]

started out as a speedpainting, still is, but man I feel like adding some colour and polish quite a few areas. but first, any thoughts?

[tja88]

i cropped it down a bit, perhaps that works better? doesnt need that much emptyness imo.

[Quigleyer]

Honestly I'm not sure how I feel about the figure and the boat all the way over there. Their dark silhouettes lead my eye over there and then there's a whole lot of canvas that I don't look at. They feel incredibly two dimensional in that position (as he/she is dragging the boat horizontally across the composition) and I tend to try to look where it's being dragged... which is right off the canvas.

[tja88]

you're absolutely right, i actually first had a big shipwreck there but it didnt feel very organic and it just felt "big". so i ended up just placing a guy there to at least get some dark values over there. perhaps i'll increase the image width and paint some beach so you can see he's aiming for land.

i didnt think this one through, and I should've, but anyway, its just a speedie.

[DAMJAN]

try to make the figure and the boat a little lighter while darkening the rocks, that way the rocks are main focus. I like the brush work.

[mos667]

I also feel like my eye is being dragged towards the left of the canvas. Maybe if you created some eye candy (higher contrast) on the right it might help your eye move around the image more. On the right side, maybe making the horizon line more apparent or the waves darker would help harmonize the movement of your eye.

Also, I feel as if the foreground and background are developed quite well, but if the middle ground was developed more it would give a stronger sense of depth. Just something to think about.

[kev ferrara]

This is a nice start. The story seems a little unclear. If you think about what is happening here (and to make a good picture, you must LIVE inside the picture as if it were real) the man is pulling the boat ashore after, it seems, navigating some rather incredibly difficult waters. I don't get the sense that this man has struggled to get to this point.

You must feel the emotion of your main character and you must get that feeling into everything. Tell one story, and use everything in your picture to tell it with.

kev