Woah, lots of good entries already. I updated my piece on page 2. I'll try to crit more in the future as well.
Skorpi: Very nice, how you added the sister into the bg. I"m liking the dramatic lightning, but what's the source? Adding a small foreground element, like a small lamp, could help.
Oregano: Some of your proportions seem odd. The head is a li'l too big. Overall it doesn't seem intentionally stylized or just sorta. Waiting for your update.
Glenter: Nice portrait. She seems a bit young for Scheherazade, but the expression is intense.
Ahnem Mee: Is she armed? And why? I don't understand the most rendered part of this page.
Daestwen: I'm loving this piece so far, very nice. Watch her right/ our left leg, has a bit amputee going.
Jessibean: Grrr, it's looking too good, but be careful with the colors that they don't blend together too much.
MJ Alcazar: I have a problem with her right leg/our left. The thigh seems to suggest that the leg is supposed to go another way, making the calf look odd. Problem is more in the hip/pelvic area. She needs a li'l more hair on top of her skull, cranium seems a bit small.
Red Frog: Because this was discussed on irc before; books didn't exist in Scheherazades era. For me, it's ok being an 'classic' element of storyteller, but Oregano has to decide on how 'historical accurate' he wants. Good costume though.
Adele: I love your flow and the funny way you combined storytelling to her.
Dirk van Dulmen: Great start. As a fan of this type of work, i can't wait to see what you'll do with a complete piece. It's insane amounts of work though.
PetiteMistress: Chaos already critted your book. I also mentioned what bugged me on irc, so i'm just waiting for your update.
Glory666: Good pose, but watch your proportions, some parts of her seem unintentionally bigger than others. Make sure she's not cramped up, bed seems kinda small for her.
Pixeltuner:watch the feet, i'm not sure they're in correct sync with the rest of the body. Seem a bit small, and the pants around the knee make it a bit hard to understand what's going on with the lower leg. Careful that you don't make her too washed out against those curtains, the pinks and skin are kinda close together, while the gold doesn't really stand out.