Please help me finishing this one. *UPDATED IMAGE BELOW*

**Theking78** · August 1st, 2008, 07:35 AM

Hi everybody,
I need some critics on this almost finished painting.
It looks ok for me but a fresh pair of eyes can help me finding errors...
Thank you.

**GoGoGodzirra** · August 1st, 2008, 07:53 AM

The shadowing on the face needs to be darker, more so on the left side, around the eye and more underneath the eyebrow, a bit around the nasal areas, where the sword crosses the face.

The eyes are pretty cool, but the eyeball shape of the left eye is a bit off and has no curve depth. Maybe put a little bit of brown in the left corner of the eye and darken it a bit in a curvature manner?

**Saturns Gate** · August 1st, 2008, 08:13 AM

Well looking at the face I can see your going for realism here. So illd push that further, especially with the hand and sword. Make some nice metallic textures and use less smudge on the fingers, not sure what material you were going for there. The hair looks kinda cartoonish, might want to add some stray strands or a slight clump of hair blowing out? Get the surrounding areas from the face up to that level or realism so it fits better. Good work.

**Hybrid_75** · August 1st, 2008, 08:19 AM

looks quite good, don't have too much to add to what has already been said apart from the background is distracting.

**CCThrom** · August 1st, 2008, 08:41 AM

The hair looks kinda cartoonish

You might also consider adding true highlights... right now the hair is a bit monochrome. Dark red to light red. Try adding true white or white/gold highlights.

**Arshes Nei** · August 1st, 2008, 12:03 PM

The lips are beautiful, nice detail and everything. The eye problem has been discussed, and also more contrast in the hair.

**jergrif73** · August 1st, 2008, 12:18 PM

Nice colors and content. You might consider bringing the saturation of the hair down by 50%. I love red eyes...

**Bowlin** · August 1st, 2008, 12:35 PM

If you look at a photograph of real hair color, even hair that's been dyed bright red, you'll see all kinds of little different colors with the red being dominant.

**Harkins** · August 1st, 2008, 02:28 PM

Awesome image.

My only critique is the solid red hair. Maybe some darker strands and highlights?

**scottmcd** · August 1st, 2008, 02:44 PM

The lips have a great level of detail, and the rest of the picture does suffer for that a little. I don't think you have to fully render everything, but a little more work around the eyes and nose is called for. My suggestions:

- Reduce the amount of nose going down to the philtrum.
- More detailing of the headband right over the eyes.
- A few individual hairs and some texture for the eyebrows.
- Fix left eye curvature.
- Make eyes appear to be a little more wet.
- Cleaner border between the sword and the face. I get that there's supposed to be some glare on the sword, but I don't know that it's working.

Nice job!

**Theking78** · August 3rd, 2008, 06:37 AM

Thank you to everybody for your help!
Here it is the updated version, please let me know if you like it.
Thank you.

**Black Spot** · August 3rd, 2008, 02:04 PM

The pupil on her right eye is a mite to high, giving her a slight boz-eyed look. Something about the underneath of her nose is not right and hopefully someone else will help. She has an absolutely lovely expression.

**Shinnoki** · August 3rd, 2008, 04:19 PM

I think adding some textures to armor and sword would work nicely.

**artiphats** · August 3rd, 2008, 04:30 PM

looking good, as stated I would use some textures at this point, also you might want to have someone pose for reference on how the shadows should look. Have someone hold a broomstick or something and stand by a light so that the direction matches your pick, then make adjustments as needed in the painting. my $0.02