painting of a girl

[bytemouse]

Ok i must say i figured i did alot better than past attempts but i feel that something just isnt right...im having trouble pinpointing exactly what things coule be corrected. Anyways, all critiques and i mean all critiques are welcome, i wont hide behind inexperience, i just wanna get better, better better!

[SquirrelQueenofDoom]

I feel odd commenting while I have such inexperience myself, but I was immediately drawn to the color of your painting so I had to drop a comment. I love her yellowy suit and the overexposed pendant, however, her boob looks too high up; also, if her suit was that tight shouldn't we be able to see the other one too? I'd add more expression to her face; she looks a trifle surprised and pissed off at the same time. Her hair is beautiful, good work.

[Nigh7shad3]

Nice job on the rendering, bytemouse. Her eyes and nose could use a little adjustment though..i suggest using photo reference of yourself or a friend.
Hmm..other than that she looks like Ash from King of Fighters 2004

[Doomgriever]

using both sharp tools and Smudge is a big mistake in this piece, looks unfinished. try focusing using either one (i recommend using sharper tools, no blur or smudge else than for the bakground)

[Tetsuo]

hi bytemouse! A couple of things here to work on -

1) the left eye draws more attention than the right. I would try to clean that eye up a little bit and if you are going for a cast shadow from the hair, you might consider darkening the values a bit more to give the impression of recession.

2) The mouth looks too blurred at the moment. Where are the highlights for the lips (if needed) and what about the lip crease? Add some dark dark purple in there to give a little depth as well.

3) no ear?

4) the breast that is showing is anatomically wrong. If you look at it carefully you will notice that it is almost growing out of her collarbone...when in reality it comes much lower on the chest (about 1 head length down from the bottom of the chin. Give or take a few inches

5) the face looks like you worked on it more than the rest of the painting. Work it all...dont neglect any parts..that way your painting wont be lonely

[bytemouse]

Thanks for the replies everyone.....im going to, eer rather im in the process of fixing as many of those as i can.....ya know its weird, how you can loook at something over and over and never notice the things others do...i guess with practice ill get better. I was curious though, looking bad, if there were things that should have been left with less detail than other parts, im not sure howt o explain but hopefully it makes sense. I guess it time for phase two of working it over.