Pg 3: "I seek my inspiration FROM foreign cities and CULTURES with this project.
...I HAVE HAD a lot of INSPIRATION FROM films and video games. I have AN MMO setting in mind.
Pg 5: "...the ruins are far FROM their former glory, but ARE still a great place for expedition (may want "exploration" instead).
I was inspired by the SCENERY
Pg 8: "Inspired by Chinese rock formations, I wanted to put a Western creature into AN Eastern setting to see if it WOULD FIT
Pg 9: ("In" should be "in")
Pg 10: ("asian" should be "Asian")
Pg 16: "A city with a giant tower in the middle as its main hall or landmark"
..."This is based UPON European architecture"
Pg 17: "The inspiration came FROM"
"non-existant"
"in concession to the rainy WEATHER, and windows are always sealed by iron bars to prevent THEFT"
("its" not "it's")
("electrical wires" not "electricity wire")
(Don't have "they're" and "they are" in the same sentence. Drop the contraction)
Pg 18: "Bombarded"
Pg 19: "Sci-fi"
Pg 20: "Satellite-like"
"Differentiate it"
"...transportation FOR a small fee"
Pg 21: "to traverse such a place" (no "in")
Pg 22: "extend to the roof for a more memorable and interesting visual experience"
"looks THE same"
Pg 24: "close-up"
"living quarterS"
"non-existant"
"cramming INTO it"
Pg 25: "The costumes have THIS in mind"
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