environment concept, please critic...

**mMark** · June 22nd, 2009, 01:20 AM

very much appreciate your comments, thanks.

-mMark

**ImagineTheEnding** · June 22nd, 2009, 01:37 AM

Vastness of space can reveal a whole lot of something with a whole lot of nothing. However, this picture does not. I like the coloring, but I feel as though through contrast, details, and illusion of space this image could be really cool. Try adding more stars and shades to the sky. As for the foreground, mid ground, and background, everything is flat. There isn't a good definition of difference between what I see way up close to me and what is farther away. There needs to be more depth in the land, and if not that then in the grass. Otherwise this image is just two planes of blue stuck together with a triangle in the middle.

The coloring technique itself is cool. I think that through progress this image could feel very solemn or even peaceful. Maybe even a little mysterious like "What in the world is that pyramid?".

Anyway, good luck.

**Nothraiya** · June 22nd, 2009, 01:38 AM

It looks great! the colors that you used for this piece really just gives it a special uniqueness to it, but looking at the picture I wish that maybe the pyramid was a little closer...Looks great from far, but I bet its even more amazing a bit closer to see the sitting statue.

(btw, I took a peek at your sketchbook and your colored renderings are simply amazing)

~N~

**Aphotic Phoenix** · June 22nd, 2009, 02:03 AM

Agree with others that you've got a nice choice of colors going for this piece, and you've done a good job of calling attention to the main focus of the image, but there are some issues.

1. A lack of atmospheric perspective, and the pyramid seems to be out of actual perspective. Right now it appears that your pyramid is actually near the edge of a cliff. The perspective lines on the pyramid would indicate a higher view point (as they terminate above the visible horizon line), and therefore more background should be visible.

2. Inconsistent light source. Assuming that the moon is the light source, as the rocks in the foreground would imply, the decorative face of the pyramid is too brightly lit in relation to the moons position.

3. As ImagineTheEnding stated, this piece is simply too empty currently. Some patches of desert plants, some dunes/mountains/mesas in the background, and some other elements to overlap the edges of the picture plane may help.

**farhany** · June 22nd, 2009, 02:19 AM

here some suggestion that i done ,i hope you like it

i add a gradiant for the horizen to add more mood and give it a littele of depth.

about your comoposition. i did the suggestion on the image.itake care

**mMark** · June 22nd, 2009, 11:37 PM

a little different version.

**Foxtrot Wolfwhistle** · June 23rd, 2009, 08:21 AM

I prefer your newer version alot more than the initial design. Now the lack of stars doesn't seem too much of an issue to me.

The placement of the pyramid seems extremely odd though because of the abundance of grasses and the little stream, but I think it adds more mystery to this piece. The water could also do with a little more work, particularly with the broken reflection of the moon.

Hope that helps!

**mMark** · June 24th, 2009, 03:05 AM

thanks guys, a little further work in this one. I brought up the horizontal line a little, reworked on the water and the moon refection and some other details.

please check it out.

**Foxtrot Wolfwhistle** · June 24th, 2009, 07:20 AM

It's getting better but the water still needs work. I loved the sparkle in the shoreline, you should keep that in. But you're right in reworking the direct reflection, I'll find some refs for you.

More of a magical looking reflection
Calmer water and brighter sky
Collection of various moonlit landscapes

You've got the position of the refection right, you just have to find the right type of reflection for that body of water. I'm sure you'll get it in the end! ^_^