6 years of concept art SB in june! Oo!

[Leo Ki]

I miss the storyboaoaoard!!!!
Well, I'll try to be of some help about the sketching and lining.
You seem to be hesitating between structure and lines of force
but you have to melt them together, sacrificing a bit of both
in quantities that depend on the style you're aiming for.
I believe your style will lean more toward the lines of force,
meaning you'll have to twist structure quite a bit, but always
trying to keep consistent in this, or the characters will
look unbalanced. I bump into the same problem all the time,
and I have no other solution than experimenting.

[ashess]

thanks Leo; ye that does kind of sum up the problem. though I feel more like I'm sacrivicing quality in both directions. meh just a little annoyed with it. it usually wears off :p
maybe I shouldnt bother and just continue the storyboard.
err. this is, to get around the frustration, 1 brigdman study in ink, 1 fantasy in ink, and 1 in pencil.

[ashess]

storyboaoard!

[cdejong]

Brigdman studies are looking very very nice, keep up with that stuff!

Your storyboards are interesting... they're pretty complex and have a lot of fighting going on in them, but I think it would serve you well to calm things down a bit. Maybe if you tried some slower pieces, instead of fighting, it would do you some good. It's pretty difficult to follow the action in your storyboards, because a lot of your shots that should establish where everyone is and who they are... are too sketchy and non-descript. I think it wouldn't hurt at all to try some storyboards with 1-2 people, doing something a bit less crazy.

Otherwise, your work looks good,your brigdman studies are definitely paying off (very beautiful studies), and your lines look pretty confident in most cases. Keep it up man.

Ik denk dat jij bent een goed artist.

Mijn Nederland is niet so goed, hahaha. Ik gewoon bij mij groteouders voor ses maanden, maar ik kan nog niet praat.

[Leo Ki]

Ik hoorde storyboooord? I agree with sebbonaparte that the fights are a bit difficult to follow. But I trust you can manage the complexity, just be kind to the poor readers who don't know everything that's going on inside your mind, and provide us with some extra info, such as a few overall views that are not part of the scenes for instance (map of the clearing with camera tracks and the like, you see?)
Apart from that, I still admire the dynamics of action. Maybe watch out your stylization of backbone flexion, you tend to arch it back a bit too often, in my view it takes strength off the characters.

[Mock]

Ah, Bridgman. Its enough to make you go insane, isn't it? =P I'm really digging the ink studies. And huge props on tackling some really difficult poses!

[ashess]

aah, wouldnt you know it. so much usefull feedback, and suddenly I'm completely swamped for time.
anyway, finally got a few minutes to myself on my own comp; and time to scan what little I scetched in the last few days.

@ sebbonaparte: haha dutch ^^ goed gedaan hoor, met zo weinig oefening! yeah I might have gone a little overboard on the action. I guess I'll need to add at least a bit of scenery somewhere. espec with the last page being a bit busy already.

@Leo: I do love flexing backs ^^ ye I only noticed when you pointed it out that I had one in over half the shots.. also, I do really need the scenery I guess. though its a little inconsequential in my mind right now. but I'll give these a re-work with some more expanation; your right. it gets hard to follow. and its supposed to be readable as a comic book too.

@Mock: ye bridgman completely rock ^^. I'm glad you like the inks; though I think I mighta got the proportions wrong on quite a few. and I like doing difficult poses. I'm afraid I might have to do some work on my perspective a bit though. maybe just do some simple exercizes. I never seem to feel like it tough :p

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here's some quick thumbnails for the 'bigfoot' competition. its a girl bigfoot that's entralled at the ladie's shoeshop. ^^
I'd love to hear which one you'll like. I'm leaning towards the on top left.

[Fitzin]

Hey hey hey.

I've noticed with this Figures arm, the overlap is confusing, open that Burne Hogarth and observe how he uses overlap. Also look at various trained artists like Bridgman and and see how they've used the principles.

Also be more aware of silhouette. Be aware of your carecters in terms of readabilty.

On the postive note, I love how you "think with a pencil" Indulge in it!

[ashess]

I know.. its a rather failed experiment with drawing a quick line drawing over a pencil drawing. maybe I shouldnt a posted it :p

[Mock]

You should post mistakes along with successes. Both are part of shaping a great artist. =P On these latest figures, try to focus in on the feet and hands. I know they were probably intentionally rushed a bit, but they're looking dough-ish rather than structure, and practicing on those will help you more than you can imagine. (Im slowly getting over my own drawing hand/feet phobia)

[cdejong]

I like the bottom middle or the one on the right, although I would swing the camera down a bit lower so that we can get a real feel for how big she is.

Also what Mock said, on both counts.

Keep it up!

[ashess]

I usually like drawing hands. put a little more work in these its also easier if you can zoom in.
@ sebbon: I tried getting the angle a little more crazy; but wanted to show the happy face too, so this is what I came up with.

[ashess]

im actually having a lot of fun on this one. hell, might even finish for once.
I'm messing with the lighting now. not too great with that. want it to be evening. a quiet night. maybe a little fog..

[cdejong]

The left leg looks a little too small, I would fatten up the quad a bit. Also think of composition... maybe move the scene to the left a little bit more so the girl is on the left side instead of the middle, and then maybe make the window bigger so we get a good look at what's the object of her adoration.

Otherwise good work! Looks like a fun exercise and you seem to have a pretty good idea of where it's going.

[Leo Ki]

Funny topic
I see a problem of scale when I imagine a human-sized human in front of the shop. If the door is the lower rectangle, then the window is very very high.
I think Bigfoot lady would look more natural with the head leaning down to the shoes. If you want to have her face clearly visible you can either change the angle a bit or place her arm differently.
About the storyboard: I'd forgotten you wanted it to be a webcomic at the same time. It's quite a challenge, and I'll keep it in mind in my critiques.

[Mock]

Ahaha, I'm loving the image so far. My only critique is that the head looks a tad too small, even for a perspective shot.

[ashess]

thanks for the advice everyone!
I finally took the time to do something with it.
(image is flipped 4 checking)

hmm.. now comes the hard part. lighting and coloring..

[Fitzin]

Ah, I see where this image is going to, Love to see where this is going. Some ideas...

I was wondering making a sort of compostion to your colours, it whould chould help us focus where you want it too.

I'm not a magician of colour, not yet.

Anyway Some info on colour info can be found in John K's blog of critiques

In concerning expression, maybe a misrable face, or and angry one... ask yourself. "What whould you feel if you where in that situation?" improvise, act it out.

[ashess]

thanks fitzin. I'm gonna put that to good use.

but first, here's some random sillyness.


Jack the barber:


Jack the barber,
always spotless and clean.
he gives shaves for a dollar,
and his haircuts are mean!

jack the barber,
and his hands are so sure!
he can cut like no other;
a bad-hair-day's cure!

Still there's some that cast doubt,
on his intentions -devout!

To those, so says Jack:
if my cut's under speck,
I'll guarantee you,
your money back!

ELFES:


most children think elves are adorable fun!
they revel in stories where elves frollic and run.

kids laugh at their antics;
no mischief too great!
amazed at elf's tricks;
yes! kids think it's 'neat!'

In elven frollics kids bask-
I suppose they see no wrong-
but those kids I would ask:

now be honest, tell true;
how much fun would it be,
if they frolliced on you?!

[ashess]

well, I have a beautiful new computer; but it took me a while to get the software working. here's a somewhat crude first try at color& light.

[brentos8]

The perspective on that last one is interesting. I like the motion in your work, and the energy and those anatomical arm studies are looking good. My suggestion would be to work more form life ,and really try and understand forms of the body. Cheers, keep pushing it.

sketchbook : http://www.conceptart.org/forums/sho...d.php?t=128243

[ashess]

thanks brentos
started adding some detail; still working on light and color.

[Fitzin]

Keep it up with that long piece, It whould be nice to see what it turns out.

I agree with Brent with working off life more, if you feel that your not getting enough, You can start a daily selfportrait thread.

The pencils are a too bit bright making them harder to read, tweaking with those scanner settings helps bring the best out of your sketches.

[kikindaface]

Damn, your poses looks really dynamic ! Yeah, i agree with the others, draw more from life, it will be good ! Keep it up

[ashess]

one more update. ye I'd like to do a live drawing class again sometime. can't seem to find time :p
the selfportraits is maybe a good idea tough ^^ can do that whenever.

[ashess]

well, time's up, so I guess this is it.
man, wonder if I'll ever get anything completely finished.
still, the feel is about right.

[cdejong]

Nice work man. It wouldn't hurt to take it further just for the sake of learning, but I think you might as well move on and try a new painting or some more storyboards. I'm interested in seeing some more storyboards .

Keep it up.

[Mock]

The best way to finish something is to do something that doesn't have a deadline. Something personal and, if possible, meaningful. That way you're inspired to work on it by something other than the pressure of needing to get it done, but you're not restricted by a deadline.

Try to work on values a bit. You're definitely improving, but the lighting on the skin looks off to me.

Keep it up! =)

[cdejong]

Hey man, keep on posting! Don't stop!

[ashess]

hey all! thank you for your comments. I'm not quiting. but after finally getting some stuff scanned my computer's onboard networkcard quit on me. I will post my work as soon as I got things working again :/ sorry for the lack of updates& feedback; ill be back soon tough!