David

[TheBoxEater]

I love this site since a lot of people here are serious and helpful about art and I'm finally feeling brave enough to ask for a critique. Have fun!

[Bai Fan]

Definitely recognizable. His left eye and cheekbone feel off though. (our right)

[rattsang]

the separation of light and shadow is more apparent in the hair than the face, there is no darks at the bottom of the drawing - my eye goes straight to the eyes then the hair and off the page.

[Mitchello]

Like Rattsang said bring some of those shadows to beneath the chin as well to add some "gravitas". His left sternocleidomastoid seems a little thick compared to the other..maybe put some dark values there also to help define the anatomy. nice work, keep it up!

[Razorleaf]

I too agree with Rattsang. Increase your contrast to bring this image to life.

[Cory Hinman]

Alternatively, if your original surface is that cool tone as opposed to a scanner effect, you could draw highlights with white, assuming you want the delicate, narrow range of greys.

[TheBoxEater]

Alright, cool, increase contrast. I can see now that it looks flat and the value needs to be more unified. Thanks very much! : )