critic needed please

[yhcic]

Hello All

I have start paint for some time more but I'm very big novice in everything i now that i must improve many thing in my paints. But alone one good critic is hard. There is one "finished" painting and one sped paint. What can i change for better... colour, anatomy, composition..?
For any help, critic i will be very thankful.


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[ryuloulou]

hello

first thing I would recommand, would be to use more pure colours.
The colours in the second picture are particulary muddy.
As a rule, try not to use black for the shadows, especially for the skintones.

Second thing.
The lights are a bit ballistically placed. in the first picture, it comes out of the leaves from everywhere without a real point of origin, and the light on the girl is very generical, althought it should be "spotted" (not sure about the word).
on the other picture, I think the character should be more lightened, but with better use of the colours, it may happen naturaly.

Composition is not bad, central is always a good composition even if it is the simpliest. Maybe you should bring some foreground to dynamise the first one.

[Serpian]

I like the first piece very much! I agree with what ryuloulou said, try not to use black as shadows, it makes the piece muddy. The colours in the background of the second piece are good, but the skin tones of the woman are very gray and boring.

I like the roots of the tree!

[yhcic]

Thanks for critic.
Good to now for future to not use black...
At first i changed lite light at women how ryuloulou say but i dnot thing that now is ok with rest world... i have there to meny light spot on that piece.


I have here changed skin color and lite some another thing.

[Noa K]

i think that in the first one u got a little carried away with the light's spots... it works on her breats but on the shoulder and belly it seems a little like a skin disease... tone it down...
also i think that if you're taking that approach, u should be consistent and a few spots of light on the tree or something of that sort.
then again, i liked the first one u posted. it is very stylized so i'm not sure these kind of details helps it...