View Full Version : "Niko the Surfer", my first animation short film is finished.
March 29th, 2009, 07:28 AM
By DjHulk (http://profile.imageshack.us/user/DjHulk)
Hi all! I'm finished my first animation short film, and now you can see it. It's the result of a very long year of hard work.
This is the video in youtube:
Comments and critiques are welcome.
March 29th, 2009, 10:35 AM
i like it! :)
really nice.. you told the story very clear and the music is great to this short.
love the little "fencing"-scene there with umbrella and seagulls.. funy=)
the start really draws me into the scene with the music and camera paning up the board,great.
but i think some of the scenes in the beginning feels just a bit too long.
(happy face)looking over the ocean --- 0:33 -> 0:37 --- then realise theres no waves(sad face).
then the sad face last round 3 seconds and then the camera shows the ocean for 5 seconds...
maby shave off a couple of sec here and there and i think it would flow more,
after that i think the rythm really picks up and you got a good dynamic imo.
(the scene where the poo hits the umbrella would possible benefit from more of a "splash"
rather than a few "ratatata" based on the amount of poo in the sand around the character after the "attack".)
the ending are ok but feels like you wanted to get this thing over with, maby a bit rushed in idea?
this is of course only personal opinions and kinda picky, i really do enjoy your film, good work indeed! =)
March 30th, 2009, 05:19 PM
Hand contacts… It’s one thing to animate for the camera but when you do a panning like the opening sequence, make sure your fingers are in contact with the board. It’s the shadow that gives it away (yes, I’m a frakking a-hole when it comes to animating hands.).
We can feel the ik on the arms a lot… Be carefull with the snappiness between your poses. Also the running part; remember that the inertia is kept and the root should move on the length almost uniformly, without pausing between keys.
When the last seagull smashes the surfer… you got me laughing there :D
Congrats on the first movie!
March 31st, 2009, 06:54 PM
Thanks for yout comments and critiques. Yes, i have a problem with the hands and her contact with board, and some animation problems. And it's true, perhaps some scenes in the beggining are the same (funny, sad, etc.). I wanted a very clear actions, and perhaps i remarked them is excess.
Sorry for my english :D
Thanks again. íThe next will be better!