redorb333
October 2nd, 2008, 04:02 PM
Hi, this is my short a little some type of mouse character, hope you like it, comments are wlecome
http://www.aniboom.com/video/283306/Pancho/?utm_source=aniboom.com&utm_medium=Scoreboard&utm_campaign=
Bendragon
October 3rd, 2008, 05:57 PM
Pretty cool. I think the pacing could quicken up in a few places so that the animation feels a bit more snappy.
Keep up the good work.
marji4x
October 4th, 2008, 09:33 AM
Just gonna back up what Bendragon said. I especially noted the part after the first time the mouse is caught. There's this looooooong pause as we see the outside of the house, the door open, the mouse get kicked out, etc.
You could immediately cut to the outside shot AS the door is opening, for example. I think the audience will still feel what is happening without a long intro shot.